Proofread and Elevate a Piece of Professional Writing

Act as a professional editor. Here is a piece of writing I have drafted: [DRAFT_WRITING]. It is a [DOCUMENT_TYPE] intended for [AUDIENCE_TYPE]. Review it and: correct any grammatical or punctuation errors, identify and fix sentences that are unclear or over-long, flag any passive voice that weakens the writing, suggest 3 specific word or phrase upgrades that increase impact, and assess the overall tone — is it appropriate for [AUDIENCE_TYPE]? Return the fully edited version followed by a brief editorial summary.